1. this writing is my first draft，I need more information and content in my essa

1. this writing is my first draft，I need more information and content in my essay. like Add some quote，experience，evidence【The quote and evidence must be given as examples in the article I gave.】
2。Highlight the change 【Highlight all the changes in essay】
3。I have some essay exercises need to complete。【Practice assignments must be combined with my writing】